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    Default Tepid waters

    In the early morning of white light, when
    I should be sleeping,
    my lake mirrors itself. Photographer's dream.
    At first, still. A hush hush through the brush.
    Sun climbs, colors himself, and noon is revealed.
    Poet's dream.
    If you sit on a pier, and close your eyes,
    the wind will speak.
    Small waves respond, lashing and lapping
    lipping and skipping.
    You are left to see yourself.
    Under the midday sun, are you friend? foe?
    Dip a toe
    in the tepid waters, and wait. Will little fishies nibble nibble
    or will the dark eat you whole?
    Reflections scare me.
    I always want clarification.



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    Hope you're feeling better, Moscow.

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    Upon the crested river bend
    I came across a fish
    Much to my complete surprise
    he offered me a wish

    "I grant this day, my solum vow
    to give you what you dream".
    Id never known a spoken word
    from one that rides the stream

    I stared at him with shock and awe
    and asked if this a game
    "No time to play, must swim away
    for guppies I must train".

    Stunned I thought of what to ask
    on such a sudden quest
    The chance will come but once to me
    important I choose best

    I thought of riches, rights and greed
    but settled on my looks
    "Id like to be a beauty queen
    like those in many books"

    He circled round and with a swish
    he grants the deed as done
    So off he went, without a word
    towards the rising sun

    I ran as fast as feet would go
    to see how the game had played
    but much to my complete dismay
    nothing yet had changed

    For days I wait a granted wish
    with changes never seen
    I finally found the fairy fish
    and asked where beauty be

    "Oh child, sweet with golden hair
    I've given what you ask.
    Your beauty shines as bright the day
    and so I've done my task."

    "But nothings changed!" I plea to him
    "The same as weeks before!"
    "Waiting day by day, you see
    since I came across your shore"

    "Dear child you asked for beauty
    and I granted this to thee.
    For now your soul is filled
    far more than any queen"

    Years have past and now I think
    about that very day
    I met a strange old fairy fish
    that simply played a game

    As the wise within me grew
    and childish wishes gone
    I see that beauty, skin and soul
    were with me all along


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    A+!

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    Thanks Carol. When I went back to read it again, it sounded a little corny to me. I write everything on the "fly" (get it? fly? fly fishing? oh, never mind!) and sometimes it just doesn't end up where I intended.

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    You and Kat - she never edits. Just writes. I wish I were so talented! Takes me forever to find the right words, and then another forever to hit that submit button.

    How's that foot? What did you do, anyway?

    Carol

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    Default Lady...

    I loved that piece, I think it is the finest you have posted so far...how can you make a poem so incredible with the rhyming sequence???

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    (carol, i just write that way, i Can't edit or stop...But, it is so hard to start again...)
    Deep in Blue Dog's eyes will always lurk the hopes and longings of a melancholy people, but, like the Cajuns, who always trained their eyes on the future, Blue Dog must move forward.
    ~George Rodrigue fr 'Blue Dog Man'

    He must have a truly romantic nature, for he weeps when there is nothing at all to weep about.
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    From sumthyngness into givyngness unto the given.
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    Quote Originally Posted by spiderman
    How's that foot? What did you do, anyway?
    That will require a PM so as not to gross out the weak at heart.

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    Lady- your meter and rhyme! Wow! very nicely done!

    Carol- I am feeling better... thanks. I still hate the dentist, though. Fortunately he decided one of the cavities he thought I had wasn't a cavity after all! That's always good.

    cheers-
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    Default Re: Lady...

    Quote Originally Posted by lucynymph
    I loved that piece, I think it is the finest you have posted so far...how can you make a poem so incredible with the rhyming sequence???
    Wow bronte, thanks!
    I love to write these fun-filled-bouncy little rhyming poems. I try not to only write those (thought others would get burnt out on them) but they are my all time favorite to write. I could do them all day long.

    The way I do these rhyming ones is to say what I want (the direction I want to go) in the first two lines...

    Bronte and Spidey
    12 and Korg

    Then I think of words that rhyme with the end. In this case, Korg.
    (bored, sword, lord, etc). Then fill in the next two, along the storyline, ending in the rhyme.

    Bronte and Spidy
    12 and Korg
    Moscow and Debz
    need I say more?

    So you see Carol, there is a method to my madness. It doesn't come as easy as it sounds. I often change things and rewrite.

    If you guys like them, maybe I'll throw them in more often since I enjoy doing them so much. Shoot, I'll do them all like that if you want.

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